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TaxiService wrote:You haven't seen like the 90% of the dicks i drew. Someday i'll make a website where people will be able to browse the contents of my old notebooks.
WilliamSub wrote:They flock with your hormones
Then there should be the start of a new indented paragraph. If this is not the case, then somehow you have got an outdated draft.The sun hung over the city of Lewë with a piercing gaze, glaring down at it from its zenith amongst the wash of the cold blue sky. No clouds accompanied it. Instead, it was the single break in an otherwise seamless sheet of azure. A bleak wind had arisen from the north and was sweeping across the city's heavily manned battlements, tugging at the helms of the wavering soldiers who stood, laden with dread and pent up apprehension, staring out over the earth in front of them. The line of soldiers ran the entire length of the battlements, which spanned over thousands of feet. Behind them sat rows of archers, awaiting the order to release a volley of arrows. Beyond this sat the city itself, a sprawling mass of mismatched stone and wood, and then a huge sheet of stone that signaled the beginning of the second tier of the city; and above that, jutting out over everything, was the triangular column of the citadel, a hulking mass of smooth grey stone.
TaxiService wrote:You haven't seen like the 90% of the dicks i drew. Someday i'll make a website where people will be able to browse the contents of my old notebooks.
WilliamSub wrote:They flock with your hormones
Hey dude, fix is incoming ASAP. I'm just waiting for it to go live. It has all the correct indentation. Expect it within 12 hours. Please don't judge the book based on this minor miscalculation- redownload it in 12 hours when a corrected draft is available, and it will still be free (all the way through until Sunday).Kayar wrote:It does look like that, but, that's what I mean. I can't tell where a paragraph starts or ends, as you have no indentations. You may want to rethink that format and add indentations, as without indentations it is harder for a reader to get his or her bearings and harder to organize what subjects are being described when. Having no indentations/paragraph breaks is something which should not be done except for a reason, usually thematically, as done by Jose Saramago in "Blindness."
TaxiService wrote:You haven't seen like the 90% of the dicks i drew. Someday i'll make a website where people will be able to browse the contents of my old notebooks.
WilliamSub wrote:They flock with your hormones
Good to knowKayar wrote:Okay, cool!
I'm not trying to judge the book based on that. I read the prologue and liked what I read. I just wasn't sure if the lack of indentation was intentional or not, and it sounded like it was, so I was giving a suggestion. I will redownload and read.
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Bunneh wrote:Now, please don't spam my newsfeed on how you need like 3 dildoes to make a giant dick statue on penisland or any of those other shitty facebook games.
Bunneh wrote:Now, please don't spam my newsfeed on how you need like 3 dildoes to make a giant dick statue on penisland or any of those other shitty facebook games.
Bunneh wrote:Now, please don't spam my newsfeed on how you need like 3 dildoes to make a giant dick statue on penisland or any of those other shitty facebook games.
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